Title:
Status:
Evaluated
by:
Author:
Six, The
Hill, J.S.
Piel, Adam
Active
Studio:
Producer:
Draft Date: 5/6/10
Pages: 108
Via Agents: DKA
Submitted Available Material
for:
Requested DKA
by:
Submitted: 06/10/2010 05:18 PM
Format: Screenplay
Locale: London
Genre: Action; Thriller Budget: Medium
Time
Period:
Present
PRODUCTION
SCHEME
When a mysterious caller threatens to kill a retired and disgraced rugby player’s ex-girlfriend if he does not kill a
high-powered banking executive, the player must decide whether to commit murder or try to identify the caller.
LOGLINE
LAYER CAKE meets TAKEN, THE SIX is a fast paced action thriller that will keep audiences guessing. It is a strong
action movie with the benefit of a well crafted concept. It is a character piece and the protagonist is well-developed,
likable and believable. Weak points include a few distracting tangents in the plot and an overly simplistic resolution.
Would be a great opportunity for any action director to show some depth of character.
COMMENTS
SUMMARY
Characters:
Dialogue:
Structure:
Story:
Excellent Good Fair Poor
X
X
X
X
Writing:
Commerciality:
Visual
Elements:
Title:
X
X
X
X
Writer:
Project: X
Recommend Strongly
Consider
Consider Consider w/
Reservation
Pass
X
EVALUATIONTOM WOODS was a successful rugby player until he crashed his sports car, inuring himself and killing a bystander.
Now he and his longtime girlfriend SOPHIE are looking at houses together. Tom admits that he does not feel ready to
move in with her. She dumps him and stomps off. Walking home Tom is approached by ZAC, a teenager new to the
neighborhood. Zac asks Tom to put up a neighborhood watch sticker, Tom blows him off.

At he investment bank where Tom works he receives a strange email. He opens it and it shows him a grainy black
and white image, then crashes his computer. Tom goes to the address shown in the picture. His cell phone is called
by a mysterious man telling him he will “be in touch.” Later, at work, his computer starts flashing, “Kill Lunt” then dies.
When he calls I.T. incriminating information is found on Tom’s computer. Though Tom swears to know nothing of this
he is fired.

The mysterious caller calls again, telling him to kill a man named Lunt or Sophie will die. Tom notices a man following
him wherever he goes. He chases down the man and manages to get his dropped cell phone. Tom rightfully guesses
that his new neighbor Zac is good with computers. Zac helps Tom to hack into the locked cell phone which leads
them to one of Tom’s investment bank’s competitors. Zac tails Lunt, and witnesses him kill a man.

A woman calls Tom and tells him she can help him. He meets her at a hotel but she tries to murder him in a hotel
room. She drugs him heavily and they wrestle. She is about to get the best of Tom when another man finds them and
kills the woman. Tom passes out. Later Tom spies on LUNT in his home. He almost kills him then Lunt receives a
sudden call and leaves. Later someone else turns up dead.

Tom sneaks into the bank after hours to try to figure out what’s going on. He finds evidence that there are six people,
each told to kill another one of the six and threatened with the death of their loved ones. Tom guesses that someone
is trying to train an assassin, and doing so by means for a daisy-chain of killing assignment meant to leave one
person standing. The man who killed the woman in the hotel finds Tom and tries to kill him. Tom gets the better of him
and begs him not to kill any more. The same caller has threatened this man’s wife and kids. The man tries to kill him
again and Tom is forced to kill him.

Tom forcibly kidnaps a reluctant Sophie and starts driving away. He gives Zac the evidence of the plot to take to his
lawyer. Lunt, now assigned to kill Tom, tracks Tom from his cell phone. When Tom stops to dump the dead man’s
body, Lunt attacks him and Sophie. They fight. Tom wins and is about to let Lunt go free when he receives a call
ordering him to finish the job. He then sees Zac a ways off, bound and targeted with red-dot laser sights. Lunt tries to
kill Tom again and Tom kills him. He, Zac and a forgiving Sophie return home.

Later, Tom is parked near Lunt’s house, watching his grieving family. He notices a red neighborhood watch sticker
and gets suspicious. He goes to Zac’s flat to find it evacuated. He returns to the building from the beginning to find
Zac with five companions. They created the scheme to get back at six people who hurt them. Zac’s father was the
bystander killed in Tom’s accident. They let Tom live with the guilt of killing two more men. Tom marries Sophie and
they have a baby girl.
SYNOPSISZac Supporting
Male
Any 15 20 Zac is a nerdy teenager who turns out to be
a ruthless killer and master of puppets.
Lunt Supporting
Male
Any 35 40 Lunt is a professional who turns to killing
when his family is threatened.
Sophie Supporting
Female
Any 25 30 Sophie is smart and beautiful. When she
senses Tom’s inability to commit she pulls
away.
Tom Woods Leading Male Any 30 35 Tom is an ex-rugby player whose career
ended when he crashed his car injuring
himself and killing a civilian. He lost his
confidence and has not been able to commit
to anything since. He is brilliant and
resourceful.
Role Type Ethnicity Age
From
Age
To
Description
ROLESLAYER CAKE meets TAKEN, THE SIX is a fast paced action thriller that will keep audiences guessing. It is a strong
action movie with the benefit of a well crafted concept. It is a character piece and the protagonist is well-developed,
likable and believable. Weak points include a few distracting tangents in the plot and an overly simplistic resolution.
Would be a great opportunity for any action director to show some depth of character.

The concept is very intriguing if not entirely original. An ex-rugby player is blackmailed into killing while another
civilian in turn tries to kill him. Its not only exciting but haunting and unnerving too. The twists and turns of the plot
are at times overly complex and a little distracting and wrap up a little too easily and quickly. Could be a truly
exceptional action movie plot with some streamlining and some polishing.

The writing was on the whole very good. The dialogue was fresh and believable, the action scenes were crisply
written succinctly one after another. The tone was eerie and at times desperate and panicked. Well paced and
realistic both at first and when the action picks up.

The writer did a great job of steadily and ruthlessly building tension throughout. Slowly Tom becomes aware of the
conspiracy and slowly the panic builds. THE SIX does a great job of exploring inner conflict as Tom feels guilt about
his girlfriend and his past, and outer conflicts as Tom fights off multiple assassins.

Tom is really the only character developed in this film. He is very well written though, and transforms throughout the
piece. He grows grateful, he learns selflessness and humility. The many other civilians-turned-killers may be a little
unbelievable but work just fine. The teenage mastermind killers revealed at the end are surprising and perhaps
distracting.

THE SIX is a fast paced action thriller which asks viewers what we would they do were they forced to kill in order to
safe those they love. It benefits from an original central plot, but is weakened when that plot taken one or two too
many twists and turns. Could be a great commercial success and an exciting opportunity for any action director
wishing to delve into an intense character piece.
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Title:
Status:
Evaluated
by:
Author:
Six, The
Hill, J.S.
Piel, Adam
Active
Studio:
Producer:
Draft Date: 5/6/10
Pages: 108
Via Agents: DKA
Submitted Available Material
for:
Requested DKA
by:
Submitted: 06/10/2010 05:18 PM
Format: Screenplay
Locale: London
Genre: Action; Thriller Budget: Medium
Time
Period:
Present
PRODUCTION
SCHEME
When a mysterious caller threatens to kill a retired and disgraced rugby player’s ex-girlfriend if he does not kill a
high-powered banking executive, the player must decide whether to commit murder or try to identify the caller.
LOGLINE
LAYER CAKE meets TAKEN, THE SIX is a fast paced action thriller that will keep audiences guessing. It is a strong
action movie with the benefit of a well crafted concept. It is a character piece and the protagonist is well-developed,
likable and believable. Weak points include a few distracting tangents in the plot and an overly simplistic resolution.
Would be a great opportunity for any action director to show some depth of character.
COMMENTS
SUMMARY
Characters:
Dialogue:
Structure:
Story:
Excellent Good Fair Poor
X
X
X
X
Writing:
Commerciality:
Visual
Elements:
Title:
X
X
X
X
Writer:
Project: X
Recommend Strongly
Consider
Consider Consider w/
Reservation
Pass
X
EVALUATIONTOM WOODS was a successful rugby player until he crashed his sports car, inuring himself and killing a bystander.
Now he and his longtime girlfriend SOPHIE are looking at houses together. Tom admits that he does not feel ready to
move in with her. She dumps him and stomps off. Walking home Tom is approached by ZAC, a teenager new to the
neighborhood. Zac asks Tom to put up a neighborhood watch sticker, Tom blows him off.

At he investment bank where Tom works he receives a strange email. He opens it and it shows him a grainy black
and white image, then crashes his computer. Tom goes to the address shown in the picture. His cell phone is called
by a mysterious man telling him he will “be in touch.” Later, at work, his computer starts flashing, “Kill Lunt” then dies.
When he calls I.T. incriminating information is found on Tom’s computer. Though Tom swears to know nothing of this
he is fired.

The mysterious caller calls again, telling him to kill a man named Lunt or Sophie will die. Tom notices a man following
him wherever he goes. He chases down the man and manages to get his dropped cell phone. Tom rightfully guesses
that his new neighbor Zac is good with computers. Zac helps Tom to hack into the locked cell phone which leads
them to one of Tom’s investment bank’s competitors. Zac tails Lunt, and witnesses him kill a man.

A woman calls Tom and tells him she can help him. He meets her at a hotel but she tries to murder him in a hotel
room. She drugs him heavily and they wrestle. She is about to get the best of Tom when another man finds them and
kills the woman. Tom passes out. Later Tom spies on LUNT in his home. He almost kills him then Lunt receives a
sudden call and leaves. Later someone else turns up dead.

Tom sneaks into the bank after hours to try to figure out what’s going on. He finds evidence that there are six people,
each told to kill another one of the six and threatened with the death of their loved ones. Tom guesses that someone
is trying to train an assassin, and doing so by means for a daisy-chain of killing assignment meant to leave one
person standing. The man who killed the woman in the hotel finds Tom and tries to kill him. Tom gets the better of him
and begs him not to kill any more. The same caller has threatened this man’s wife and kids. The man tries to kill him
again and Tom is forced to kill him.

Tom forcibly kidnaps a reluctant Sophie and starts driving away. He gives Zac the evidence of the plot to take to his
lawyer. Lunt, now assigned to kill Tom, tracks Tom from his cell phone. When Tom stops to dump the dead man’s
body, Lunt attacks him and Sophie. They fight. Tom wins and is about to let Lunt go free when he receives a call
ordering him to finish the job. He then sees Zac a ways off, bound and targeted with red-dot laser sights. Lunt tries to
kill Tom again and Tom kills him. He, Zac and a forgiving Sophie return home.

Later, Tom is parked near Lunt’s house, watching his grieving family. He notices a red neighborhood watch sticker
and gets suspicious. He goes to Zac’s flat to find it evacuated. He returns to the building from the beginning to find
Zac with five companions. They created the scheme to get back at six people who hurt them. Zac’s father was the
bystander killed in Tom’s accident. They let Tom live with the guilt of killing two more men. Tom marries Sophie and
they have a baby girl.
SYNOPSISZac Supporting
Male
Any 15 20 Zac is a nerdy teenager who turns out to be
a ruthless killer and master of puppets.
Lunt Supporting
Male
Any 35 40 Lunt is a professional who turns to killing
when his family is threatened.
Sophie Supporting
Female
Any 25 30 Sophie is smart and beautiful. When she
senses Tom’s inability to commit she pulls
away.
Tom Woods Leading Male Any 30 35 Tom is an ex-rugby player whose career
ended when he crashed his car injuring
himself and killing a civilian. He lost his
confidence and has not been able to commit
to anything since. He is brilliant and
resourceful.
Role Type Ethnicity Age
From
Age
To
Description
ROLESLAYER CAKE meets TAKEN, THE SIX is a fast paced action thriller that will keep audiences guessing. It is a strong
action movie with the benefit of a well crafted concept. It is a character piece and the protagonist is well-developed,
likable and believable. Weak points include a few distracting tangents in the plot and an overly simplistic resolution.
Would be a great opportunity for any action director to show some depth of character.

The concept is very intriguing if not entirely original. An ex-rugby player is blackmailed into killing while another
civilian in turn tries to kill him. Its not only exciting but haunting and unnerving too. The twists and turns of the plot
are at times overly complex and a little distracting and wrap up a little too easily and quickly. Could be a truly
exceptional action movie plot with some streamlining and some polishing.

The writing was on the whole very good. The dialogue was fresh and believable, the action scenes were crisply
written succinctly one after another. The tone was eerie and at times desperate and panicked. Well paced and
realistic both at first and when the action picks up.

The writer did a great job of steadily and ruthlessly building tension throughout. Slowly Tom becomes aware of the
conspiracy and slowly the panic builds. THE SIX does a great job of exploring inner conflict as Tom feels guilt about
his girlfriend and his past, and outer conflicts as Tom fights off multiple assassins.

Tom is really the only character developed in this film. He is very well written though, and transforms throughout the
piece. He grows grateful, he learns selflessness and humility. The many other civilians-turned-killers may be a little
unbelievable but work just fine. The teenage mastermind killers revealed at the end are surprising and perhaps
distracting.

THE SIX is a fast paced action thriller which asks viewers what we would they do were they forced to kill in order to
safe those they love. It benefits from an original central plot, but is weakened when that plot taken one or two too
many twists and turns. Could be a great commercial success and an exciting opportunity for any action director
wishing to delve into an intense character piece.
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